One, Another, The Last
one sleeps sitting,
the suit was teeth white
long before it was his—
long before the thirsty floors
of the subway filled it like a canvas
with the murky insignias
of the underground
another trudges stacks of stairs
black bags in tow, dark bulging tail—
innumerable cans and shrapnel,
each crushed beneath a different
heel in the red gutters of chinatown-
a nickel each at the end of the line
the last is hunched on a plastic pail
harmonica hands, singing to clouds
i know all of you can see me,
i know you hear my voice.
saying stop pretending i don’t exist,
as pools of tourists begin to collect
at the corners, signals turning
to wash them all away again
the suit was teeth white
long before it was his—
long before the thirsty floors
of the subway filled it like a canvas
with the murky insignias
of the underground
another trudges stacks of stairs
black bags in tow, dark bulging tail—
innumerable cans and shrapnel,
each crushed beneath a different
heel in the red gutters of chinatown-
a nickel each at the end of the line
the last is hunched on a plastic pail
harmonica hands, singing to clouds
i know all of you can see me,
i know you hear my voice.
saying stop pretending i don’t exist,
as pools of tourists begin to collect
at the corners, signals turning
to wash them all away again
1 Comments:
"the subway filled it like a canvas"
"innumerable cans and shrapnel,
each crushed beneath a different
heel in the red gutters"
"thirsty floors"
LOVE THESE.
Ahem. I like this poem a lot--it seems to be a sort of different style than your other poems--a little more abstract. Love that. The imagery in this one, as well as in the eyebrow one is just killer.
But if you will, in the spirit of honest comments on blogs (yours were great for the last two of mine--esp the kick in the pants you gave me for on the ergo one--so thank you), I would only ask that you take some real risks in your poetry. Stray further from your beloved format. Pee into the wind. Your writing is clean and beautiful, and if I could only wish one thing about it, it's that I would love to see it come more alive. Bite, tear, seduce, etc.
Feel free to disregard this entirely, or laugh about it with your new poetry snob friends at school.
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