Thursday, September 14, 2006

Knock Knock

there was a time (dark)
when the words refused to come.
like disobedient dogs, they milled
about the house, begging for prime rib
and pissing at the carpet.
i could never leash you, i said.
it is against your religion.
and i would occupy the writing chair,
but writing would not occupy me.
instead i had to listen to the sound of birds
not hitting the windows
and tongue-inspired waves
lapping at the plastic walls of dishes,
empty pockets full of fingers.

3 Comments:

Blogger Cameron J. said...

if i might offer a suggestion, i'd like to see more of an unfulfilled desire for violence in this poem. i think the bird part hints at it and it adds such a biting frustration to the voice that i want more of it.

also, we went and saw a silent movie about pirates last night and we missed you. hope sf is bitchin'.

4:59 PM  
Blogger A l y s s a said...

I think Cameron caught the i bug.

As for you, Mr W, your poetry has turned a fiery hand. Lost control somehow, in an exciting way. Am v curious to know if this poem was inspired by something new and amazing (!) you're doing at poetry camp. This poem seems to lose itself in the Beaver Creek of the mind, letting go of images, passing time, making small syntactical changes to keep our reading eyes pencil sharp.

PS I got beaten with an ivory stick today in poetry class for using a ridiculous and infuriating title. I can't decide if I should persist that way and insist it's an artistic choice and you can't tie me down to the rigidity of modernist poetry, or if I should just hop on the lemming train and let them take me to reasonableville. Ideas? (I bring this up in no small part to tell you that of late your bizarro titles have been much appreciated--aka fabulous.)

I just had pudding--can you tell?

6:59 PM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

at least when you're in grown-up creative writing classes, you dont have to spend 3 class periods discussing the difference between concrete and abstract...(or at least I hope you don't)...

5:38 PM  

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